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【PTE写作秘籍】Write Essay高分范文解析

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发表于 2017/6/30 15:36:52 | 显示全部楼层 |阅读模式

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​PTE考试写作部分的Write Essay相对于雅思考试来说的确较为简单,但是也绝不是像网络上传言的一样光靠套模板就能拿到高分。

之前就有好多同学拿着成绩单问,为什么他们的Writing分数不高?很多同学的Written Discourse可是将近满分呀!

很多的老师们发现,很多套模板的同学Grammar和Vocabulary分数都不高,甚至会出现十几分这样的低分。其次Writing部分的分数也会受到Summarize Written Text, Summarize Spoken Text, 以及Fill in the blanks的影响。如果光靠套模板,Write essay的分数可能不错,但是在语法和词汇都不扎实的基础上,其他三项的分数肯定不高。那整体Writing的分数怎么可能会高呢?

另一点就是,最近很多同学都发现自己的成绩有On Hold的情况发生,这很可能意味着你的成绩正在被人工审核。一旦被人工审核,只套模板、不管语法和词句逻辑的作文绝对分数就会被拉低。这是好几位同学血的教训哦!

所以再次提醒大家,不要相信网上所谓只要你往里填充内容就能拿高分的模板。就算有模板,也应该是你自己总结、归纳出的结构模板。

PTE写作要求的确不高,那么怎么样才能在没有模板的情况下,拿到高分甚至满分呢?今天就给大家分析一篇老师给出的满分范文,满分的结构,满分的用词用句。各位同学赶快参考学习啦!一是要注意学习整体文章的结构,二是要学习文章中加粗部分的关键词。

关键词包含Topic-related词汇,在此题中即是旅游相关的词汇,在文中必须反复出现,系统才能判断你的文章是否切题;其次包含各类衔接词、过渡词,这样系统才能判断你的文章结构是否合理。

It is said that for some developed countries, tourism may cause some disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this? Support your point of view with details from your own experiences, observations or reading.
Tourism is a source of income for countries around the world. However, some people claim that tourism causes disadvantages such as overpopulation. 【前两句话简短的陈述Background】I strongly disagreewith the mentioned claim and believe that tourism brings nothing but benefits to a country. 【之后立即表明自己的观点是strongly disagree】This is because tourism is a major source of income for governments and is also an opportunity to advertise the country’s pride such as animals or culture. 【接下来立即说明Disagree的具体原因,引出下文】

Tourism generally refers to the industry where people across the world visit one country for a holiday. When tourists visit a country, they will tend to purchase local products and visit hotspots that will require spending. This will notonly provide jobs for the locals butalso allow the government to earn more income, leading to an increase in the country’s economy.【第二段陈述第一个理由,即旅游可以带来经济效益,其中跟旅游及经济相关的关键词都反复出现了多次。】

Furthermore, tourism also allows visitors to experience a country’s culture and food. If a tourist enjoyed his experience in a country, he may share his experiences with friends or colleagues and that may eventually lead to more visits from tourists. These visits will notonly help the country’s economy, but will also allow the country to be more known amongst the other countries in the world. 【第三段进一步阐述第二个理由,即旅游可以传播文化和美食。段落开始即用Furthermore衔接上文,并且段落中也多次出现旅行相关的关键词汇,保证切题。】

Although there is the possibility of tourism bringing some disadvantages such as overpopulation in a country, I believe that the advantages greatly outweigh the disadvantages. Therefore, countries should definitely put in effort to promote tourism. 【最后一段Conclusion,经过paraphrase之后重述自己的观点,并进一步提出简单的一句further advice “国家应该进一步推广旅游业”。】

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