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If there's a way to improve yourself, which one among the three choices you wouldtake?
1.take more exercise
2.eat more healthy food
3. reduce the amount of stress
大纲选择Atake more exercise。三个分论点如下:
1)多运动可以使体质变好;
2)多运动可以结交新朋友;
3)多运动可以锻炼意志力,进而迁移到其他方面;
开头段(背景引入+他人观点+自己观点+过渡句)
Nowadays, modern people tend to focus much more on how to become a better person. Some suppose that having a healthier diet is more important while others insist that maybe a relaxing life can actually help. However, from my perspective, I consider doing more exercise will be the best choice. My view point is based onthe following reasons and examples.
主体段一(分论点1+展开句+例子)
To begin with, taking more exercise can lead to a better body condition. As we all know, individuals keeping regular exercise are less vulnerable than those sitting in front of television all the time. Sports such as basketball or tennis will strengthen one's immune system. For example, there is a famous master of Chinese martial art called Zhang Weidong. Surprisingly, when he was just a little boy, he suffered a lot from his weak physical condition. Every two weeks he would have a fever, coughing and sneezing, which made his parents extremely worried. In order to improve his son's health condition, Zhang Weidong's father brought him to a fight master studying boxing. Through continuous exercise, little Zhang Weidong gradually got rid of the entanglement of diseases. Master Zhang is not an expectation. Actually, thousands of children improve their physical condition through various kinds ofsports. Thus supports the fact that exercise can help us attain a stronger body.
主体段二(分论点2+展开句+例子)
Moreover,joining sports activities may offer us much more opportunity to make new friends. Friendship often emerges when people fight together for the same goal, such as winning acompetition. For instance, my cousin once was a shy and lonely boy. Computer games occupied his entire world, which led to the fact that he had almost no intimate friend. His parents tried a lot but still could not successfully persuade him to extend his social circle. Fortunately, when he wasin grade 8, his school organized a basketball competition and he was chosen to be a team member. Initially, my cousin was not willing to join the team because the only thing he liked was to stay at home and play video games. Nevertheless,my aunt and uncle found him gradually become much more active in spending his time with his teammates. When asked about why he become interested in interacting with other people, my cousin said he felt it easier to get along with each other when they had a common goal to achieve. Therefore, for some individuals with inadequate social confidence, getting involved in certain kind of sports can effectively help them to overcome their shyness and make new friends.
主体段三(分论点3+展开句+例子)
Last but not least, physical challenges will result in a stronger willpower. During the process of handling the difficulties in one's physical activities, man can also acquire a powerful mind and thus will play an important role in his future career. Take President Obama as an example. President Obama was a crazy fan in basketball and jogging. Although he had a heavy workload when he was the American president, Mr. Obama never quit exercising. When asked about his opinion towards taking sports activities, he pointed out that although it was very tough when he was taking some challenging activities such as marathon, he actually steel his body as well as his mind. Once he made a comparison between his president work and his exercise because they were both filled with challenges. And he proclaimed that the willpower obtained through physical training helped him to successfully overcome the toughness during his presidency. As we can see, powerful willgotten from exercise can also help us in other fields.
结尾段(重述总论点+重述三个分论点)
To sum up, when it comes to the best way toimprove oneself, taking more exercise should be our first choice. It can notonly make us stronger physically, but also build a bridge to making newfriends. In addition, people who can come up with the difficulties duringsports activities will be much more likely to overcome the tough situations inhis career life.

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